Cover Letter Example for a Human Resources Job

There are many things I like about this cover letter example for a Human Resources job. I also have some thoughts about how to make it better. Take a look at the letter that Liz wrote, then see my version, which has a few changes.

Liz's First Cover Letter Example for a Human Resources Job

Dear Recruiter,
I am a young lady with a Bachelor degree of Commerce (B.Com – Human Resources) at the University of ** having graduated last spring. I am applying for the position of HR Administrator/Payroll Accountant. Currently I am working with ** as an Assistant Human Resources Officer.Taking initiatives has always been my academic and career focus. I certainly understand responsibility, hold an intense work ethic, possess social skills that can build and maintain relations across and beyond the organization and strive to do my best in any situation to meet corporate objectives.

I believe my strength, abilities and skills make me a perfect fit for this job. I am extremely reliable, considerate, personable, and I am comfortable working with all personality types.

Thank you for taking the time to review my credentials. I would welcome the opportunity to discuss how my education, practical skills, and background qualify me to be a member of your company.

Please give me a call at 555-555-5555 and/or email me at XX.

Sincerely,
Liz XX

My Thoughts About Liz's Sample Cover Letter

What I like best about Liz's cover letter is that it's short and has a natural flow. I feel like I sort of know her after reading it. That’s really nice!

Without going into a lot of detail, here are a few things that I think would improve this cover letter.

  • The opening sentence needs a little help. “I am a young lady” sounds old-fashioned and out of place here. I suggest deleting that phrase and reworking the sentence to make a smoother entrance to the rest of the letter.
  • The second paragraph has good stuff in it. I think it would be great to break it into bullet points with a short intro sentence at the beginning.
  • Don't say that you’re a "perfect fit" for the job. Let them decide that. You could say you’re an "excellent candidate" for the job. It’s a little more humble, yet still confident (in my way of thinking).

Here's what Liz's letter might look like with these suggestions implemented.

Improved Version of Liz's Cover Letter

Dear Recruiter,
Having recently earned my Bachelor degree of Commerce (B.Com – Human Resources) at the University of **, I would like to apply for the position of HR Administrator/Payroll Accountant at your firm. Currently I am working with ** as an Assistant Human Resources Officer.Taking initiative has always been my academic and career strength, along with:

  • Understanding responsibility.
  • Holding an intense work ethic.
  • Possessing social skills that build and maintain relations across and beyond the organization.
  • Striving to do my best in any situation to meet corporate objectives.

I believe my strengths, abilities and skills make me an excellent candidate for this job. I am extremely reliable, considerate, personable, and I am comfortable working with all personality types.

Thank you for taking the time to review my credentials. I would welcome the opportunity to discuss how my education, practical skills, and background qualify me to be a member of your company.

Please give me a call at 555-555-5555 and/or email me at XX.

Sincerely,
Liz XX

Other Cover Letter Samples

Want to see more cover letter examples? Here you go...

You might also want to browse: